On Tuesday the 22nd of November Team East from Loburn School went on camp to Omaka Scout camp.
When they arrived they were surprised by how big the camp really was. Omaka Scout Camp is a perfect place for a family holiday or a idea place for a wedding or even just for a swim in the river. The camp has hot showers, a big kitchen with lots of facilities, good camping areas and a few huts to sleep in with comfortable beds.
Fantastic writing Milly! Great describtion but maybe next time make it a bit longer.
ReplyDeleteWell done Milly, you're right I think everyone was surprised by what they found at Omaka. You have included the basic information a reader would need when considering a place to stay. The photo you have chosen shows our peaceful the place is. More description and the use of persuasive language would add impact to your writing.
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